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No, Lila remembered. He had not. Instead he gathered their things awkwardly in his arms, as if he were going to run off with them, leaving her standing alone and embarrassed. She had grown panicked then, standing in the checkout line. She had been afraid of being deserted. That part she did not share with Donnelle.

This paragraph from the short story “Opportunity” by Belle Boggs is an interesting way of explaining her thoughts in her Lila’s head. Here we see Lila describing this moment in such a depth, but not over wording her emotions. The choice in words, at the right moment, gives the emotional depth, but still carries the story along without prolonging the emotional monologue that a lot of writers do.

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